tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8821350472422810239.post1321974231257087862..comments2023-05-19T08:51:23.931-06:00Comments on Smartphone Shakespeare: Elise's Draft SonnetGideonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13328578010572353558noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8821350472422810239.post-77887155322371964142016-09-12T21:59:03.073-06:002016-09-12T21:59:03.073-06:00I think that in line 7 the iambic pentameter might...I think that in line 7 the iambic pentameter might be off because the stressed word is "in," not "this." But I could be wrong; I don't really have an ear for it.Kevin Dormanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11741301834210005511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8821350472422810239.post-64101916661075985032016-09-12T21:52:06.179-06:002016-09-12T21:52:06.179-06:00It's true your sonnet isn't super sing-son...It's true your sonnet isn't super sing-songy, but I feel the clunkyness fits the tone, and subject well. I might remove the coma after tragedy in line 2, and add a coma in line 10 after hate. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12379905915779420679noreply@blogger.com