tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8821350472422810239.post808487702358341543..comments2023-05-19T08:51:23.931-06:00Comments on Smartphone Shakespeare: Kate's Draft SonnetGideonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13328578010572353558noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8821350472422810239.post-72578465996517157792016-09-13T09:09:08.989-06:002016-09-13T09:09:08.989-06:00Many of your lines don't have enough syllables...Many of your lines don't have enough syllables, so you might want to consider revising those. I don't like the Raiders, but I like the football idea.Kevin Dormanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11741301834210005511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8821350472422810239.post-81654268319502751742016-09-13T09:07:39.435-06:002016-09-13T09:07:39.435-06:00I think your rhyme scheme sounds great! I didn'...I think your rhyme scheme sounds great! I didn't notice any discrepancies with the rhyming. I also loved that you didn't reveal the team until almost the last line. It made me have to think it through a little more.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02902927465722295043noreply@blogger.com