I feel like you really made this sonnet your own. It is obvious through your cadences and expression that you understand the "story" of the sonnet, and that made it much more enjoyable to listen to. Doesn't seem too amateur to me :)
It was really good! I felt dorky doing it too.
I did this same one, I love how you made it your own especially at times like the bending sickles compass come which is difficult at times.
This was so good! You made it conversational and interesting. Nice work!